Revision of Revision

Nyomi Mosley

Cline

10-2-11

When I write a paper my usual focus is on its sound and structure. So when I revise my focus is usually on the same page. I question myself with question of “How would this paper sound to the reader? Does the paper flow? Am I making good points?” and so on. However, when I was younger I did not really revise because my papers were so long and repetitive. I would read through each paper maybe two or three times but never more than that amount per paper. Now I revise all the time because it affects the outcome of my papers by making them easier to read, and a lot shorter in length.The changes that revising allows to every essay are so numerous that I cannot belive I did not revise in the past.

In my next essay I plan to make several changes. I would like to keep the same points I have yet make them stronger more argumentative. I noticed that was one thing that I lacked in Essay #2. I am also planning on making my explanations less repetitive. Repetitiveness in writing has been a problem with me since I was a child. Many times, I would find myself repeating the same sentence several times in each paper that I wrote. However, I would never realize it because I would never revise! The next revision I plan to make in Essay #2 is to explain my quotes more. In this essay I provided quotes that supported and they supported my points in the essay. However, I failed to provide and explanation of the quote itself. I realize that this may have been beneficial to the explanation of my points yet, it did not allow the reader to focus on understand the poem itself. This brings me to the final change I plan to make in this essay. That is to surround my points and arguments on the poem alone and its meaning. While this essay may have held points that were arguable and possibly correct the essay was not really and explanation of the poem but rather and argument of the poem’s meaning. There are so many changes I plan to make in my essay and I only hope that they will be profitable and make for and outstanding result.
Here is a link I found on revision:
http://grammar.about.com/od/developingessays/a/revisecheck.htm

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